Please critique my cover letter.?
My name XXX
Address XXX
phone number XXXX
email XXX
July 14, 2010
To whom this may concern,
Please accept my application for the Customer Service Specialist advertised on your King County website. I would like to continue to develop my customer service skills while creating a challenging and fun work environment. Customer service is particularly appealing to me, because I enjoy working with the public, and helping people solve their problems or concerns. I am very qualified and would be an asset to this position because of my experience with customer service.
I feel my experience at the Washington State Department of Licensing, Hi-Tech Screen Graphics, and retail give me the upper hand in this job opening. As a current part time college student I am studying business, and will be getting an A.A. degree. Here are some of the classes I have taken or will be taking; managing customer service, computer applications, (concentrating in; Word, Excel, Outlook, and Access) basic accounting, money management, business government and society, and business law. My schooling will not affect job hours, as all of my classes are online.
Thank you for your consideration. I look forward to hearing from you to arrange an interview.
Sincerely,
xxxxxxxxx
Wow thats really impressive!! 
good job and it sounds like you would be dedicated, they have no reason to turn you down. good luck, too!
Wow thats really impressive!!
good job and it sounds like you would be dedicated, they have no reason to turn you down. good luck, too!
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you need some changes," for the opening of customer service specialist"
retail, what?.
use more paragraphs
take out the fun part, working with the public is not fun, and they would not take you serious.
education should be listed, and special qualifications should also be listed separately and not thrown all together.
Do not list classes that you will be taking. List the ones you have taken .
The ending is very good, needs work.
It isn’t July yet, and don’t send it so soon. wait for the opening.
Never start a sentence with "As"
Take out the xxxxs, hugs, (I know it’s your signature, isn’t it?)
Maybe a few hugs and kisses would help! just kidding.
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